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She'll be free by ~kakanina:iconkakanina:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Family Life > Spoken Word


Even the flies tease her
because they enjoy undictated freedom
whereas she pauses,
ideas everyday
indending escape
yet trapped here
inside her mother's web
lies
deceit
hatred
force
religion
imprisonment
enclosing her
tighter the web encroaches

scared barely describes
the
insignificance
deep-rooted insecurites
unexplained emotion
anger
violence
the fears inside the years gone.

despite everything,
the woman remains
the mother
the one she loves
the one inside her mind, murdering the flies
they're surely her spirit
personified
free yet
trapped inside the fate
inside the web.

She'll break free,
She'll tear the web
Flee where her heart resides
she'll be free
before she caves
she'll be free
her heart smiles.

She'll be free.
©2009 ~kakanina
:iconkakanina:

Author's Comments

I did it :D
:iconrawem0tion:'s Quest #18: Write an entire poem or prose that contains the letter 'e' at least once in
every word (the most common lipogram in reverse)

Man that was harder than I thought.
And it kinda sucks, but meh, I'm happy enough, I did it :boogie:

And soon I'll be free :D

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~KeNzIeGoRaWr Nov 6, 2009, 9:14:26 PM
skills lol i didnt even notice every word had e in it till u mentioned lol

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~Kenzie~
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~kakanina Nov 6, 2009, 9:54:21 PM
xD
It was so hard D:
Or maybe I'm just too tired xD
Staying up all night for the second time in 3 days isn't feeling like the greatest idea at 5:53 xD

--
'Reality can destroy the dream,
Why shouldn't the dream destroy reality?'
George Moore

=RawEm0tion
:icondustynovarocks:
~DustyNovaRocks Nov 7, 2009, 2:25:31 AM
The word "longing" on line 4 doesn't have the letter E. Just pointing it out, :)

Nonetheless I think it's really nice because it's not an easy to thing to do.
:iconkakanina:
~kakanina Nov 7, 2009, 3:07:33 AM
:O
*checks*
*falls back into seat*
*sobs uncontrollably*
nooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Will fix it now xD
Thankyou :D

--
'Reality can destroy the dream,
Why shouldn't the dream destroy reality?'
George Moore

=RawEm0tion
:iconfantje92:
~Fantje92 Nov 7, 2009, 3:18:00 AM
and Woman has no E either :) and Mind! and spirit. Sorry xD But still you did a great job! It's a great poem, and I didn't even notice the E stuff till I read the description.

--
Fear my wise quote, for it is wise!
"Minds are like parachutes, they only work when they're open", said by some guy, or maybe some non-guy, I dunno... I read it somewhere, and it's quite brilliant.
:iconkakanina:
~kakanina Nov 7, 2009, 3:51:15 AM
D: D: D:
No faaaaaiiiir D:

--
'Reality can destroy the dream,
Why shouldn't the dream destroy reality?'
George Moore

=RawEm0tion
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~Moonbeam-Lives-On Nov 7, 2009, 10:23:16 AM
I didn't even notice that "e" was inside every word... That's amazing! I do think it adds a sense of unity though, but in a subtle way even though it seems obvious.

I like that you talked about the flies in the beginning and then tied them in near the end of the middle.

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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."

Pessimist & Procrastinator

All Moonbeam.
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~shecklair Nov 7, 2009, 1:39:46 PM
Wow!! That's so unique!!!

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Oops. I accidentally dropped my fork into an electrical socket.
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